Monday, April 23, 2012

Roofless..

Starved eyes pray
For bright horizon
Roofless hut


World always discriminated rich and poor. This gap always increased. Prayer is the only hope for poor, praying for a square of meal, praying for basic amenities, praying for their shelter. Irony is depicted in last two lines. Mesmerized, on how the way world runs, on how we celebrate, on how we survive, on how one wishes for brightness in a roofless hut. Attempt to show the dark side of "Mesmerization".


This Haiku is written for The Heights Of Haiku - April 2012. The prompt for today is Mesmerize.
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18 comments:

  1. PranitaApril 23, 2012 at 12:10 AM

    "For bright horizon
    Roofless hut"

    Amazing word play!!! Loved it...

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    1. Jaideep RaoApril 23, 2012 at 10:43 AM

      Thank you, our entries are again one after other :D

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  2. Ramesh SoodApril 23, 2012 at 12:17 AM

    You have achieved what you set out to while writing this haiku..it says and shows.. good one..

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    1. Jaideep RaoApril 23, 2012 at 10:45 AM

      Thank you sir,I attempted to put the scenario that we see everyday. Hope it'll change.

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  3. Mohini PuranikApril 23, 2012 at 12:43 AM

    Deep shadow of darkness still bright one..

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    1. Jaideep RaoApril 23, 2012 at 10:46 AM

      A try to convey the another side of life..thank you!

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  4. Sri ValliApril 23, 2012 at 3:56 PM

    Hope dreams in those starved eyes get fulfilled ...Lovely haiku Jaideep :)
    Sweet escape

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  5. CYNOSUREApril 23, 2012 at 5:12 PM

    again a wonderful and deep one from you...thoughtful...beautifully written... :)

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  6. LSHApril 23, 2012 at 7:58 PM

    I can totally picture it. You got it great!!!

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  7. PattiKenApril 23, 2012 at 10:03 PM

    SO sad.

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    1. Jaideep RaoApril 23, 2012 at 10:45 PM

      yeah, and it is hard reality in most part of the world unfortunately..

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  8. Sasha A. PalmerApril 23, 2012 at 11:03 PM

    The "roofless hut" is a very strong image. A lot of feeling in this short haiku.

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  9. itsyvitsyApril 24, 2012 at 12:10 PM

    Bright horizon and roofless hut. That's nice. You feel the brightness of the sun through the roofless hut and then hope for a brighter horizon. The brightness and brighter to be seen in different (poetic) contexts. Nice expressions.

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    1. Jaideep RaoApril 24, 2012 at 12:46 PM

      Thank you, yeah I had to get bright horizon expression, hence this attempt,.

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