Rain pour bliss
Your hackneyed ardours
Have wrecked hearts
Attempt to put two emotions. Both of them longing for bliss. First one, gazing at the rain Gods for a downpour after a prolonged zeal of Sun, which has resulted in dried-up crops, greenless farms. Second one, a lover who is unable to convey his/her feelings and is just hoping that the feelings become mutual!
This Haiku is written for The Heights Of Haiku - April 2012. The prompt for today is Bliss.
Both emotions are perfectly expressed, very difficult creation done perfectly.
ReplyDeleteYou have done it very well.. good one..
ReplyDeletethank you sir!
DeleteOh, I really like the powerful emotion in this haiku.
ReplyDeleteAttempt to put it, thanks!
Deletevery beautifuly penned :)and do off the word verification ..thanks :)
ReplyDeleteYeah I did that, sorry, wasn't aware of it before.
Deletewell written ~ powerful ! ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^
ReplyDeleteDhanyavadagalu :)
Delete'Hackneyed ardours' - intense!!! Very beautiful.. :)
ReplyDeleteI used both of them for the first time, thanks for appreciation!
DeleteHaiku expressing emotions powerfully...loved it
ReplyDeleteLove these comments!,thank you :)
DeleteI can relate to your haiku in its very sense
ReplyDeleteNot sure of the context you are relating, even I sort of had these moments!
DeleteVery beautiful haiku....Rainfall <3
ReplyDeleteRainfall!, word itself brings joy :)
DeleteJust a request...please turn off verification code to comment, It will be easy to post a comment :)
ReplyDeleteSure, I did it now, wasn't aware of it, Sorry.
DeleteWell done.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
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